Author's first time writing. Character and story development needs a lot of improvement. It is hard to stay immersed or invested in this story. It seems more like a wish fulfillment Mc strong from the start unrealistic training speed type novel.

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slow down the pace is too fast............

i wanna see a fan fic with Bomb-bomb fruit as the main devilfruit eaten by the Mc. This fruit was introduced in the alabasta arc. one of the Barocue works members ate the Fruit. I don't remember the name but his partner was the kilo kilo fruit user. A girl with an umbrella. Sorry for giving you a 3 star but i have not read the fic yet.

He gets fruit right after reincarnation, instead being reincarnated into the island where he has to expore to find out that the fruits location. He is uninteresting character, a child with bland personality and no goal, and his training is never shown. Exploring, training, fighting, sailing, arriving to other islands, each could be a few chapters, instead is a paragraph. Then plot is unrealistic, as soon as he arrives to an island he gets into a fight without explanation about the island or why he went there, he saves people and gives his training manual to a child, then fights more people that were are not introduced.

I just finded this Story together with your Naruto Evil story. Hey do you know Hokage Master.? or LemonSage FF.? And why i want Sakura die.? She is pathetic garbage of human being. In Og it only worked because of Kishimoto forced plotline. But lets be real nobody would tolerate her for even 5.min. I sure not. So stab her with kunai during fight on the bridge during mission to Wave. Oh and i .will aggre with you It is not Yuki devil fruit who is weak it was Monet who was weakling. If someone like Nami eat it.? oh boy. she would be a monster. Oh do you know Storm Pirate Luffy.?

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what is the difference between snow and ice I kinda thought snow was just flakes of ice hmmmm