I love the description at the first setting of your chapter. It was intriguing but there are somethings that I was quick to note. First things first, your grammars. They need to be properly edited before you publish. You need to proofread them after writing – not immediately though – so that you'd know where you go wrong. Also the beginning process, I get it was kind of getting dragged. I didn't get what I want. There was nothing at the begining that said I should stay to read. nothing to gimme thrills. with that said, you need to add conflict. Something that's gonna hook your readers and make them be like... "I'm not leaving till this author updates more!" You get what I mean right? All the way with the perfect editing and proofreading, your book will do well. Just make sure Dem first three chapters can captivate readers and hook them to the end. I believe you can do this. Fighting!
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As for the Grammer's, I will edit it straight away. Though that how the book setting is and I try reducing it to that... also the ending of the chapter have an intriguing part which I deemed can hook readers*will recheck to see either I can amend it"(thanks for your opinions)
Okay. thanks. Will stick to read more.♥️
Muhammed_shafa:As for the Grammer's, I will edit it straight away. Though that how the book setting is and I try reducing it to that... also the ending of the chapter have an intriguing part which I deemed can hook readers*will recheck to see either I can amend it"(thanks for your opinions)
