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Bryan07_SuiraLv111yr
2023-06-17 22:00

In my opinion the story has a good pace, but those 3 chapters of Komi's point of view and now these 3 chapters of Shikimori's point of view, are unnecessary, a single chapter for each one was enough, those 6 chapters told us what we already knew, because in those chapters nothing interesting is mentioned, I hope the author with the following heroines doesn't do the same, a single chapter is enough to talk about that we already know.

AFFECTION SYSTEM: CONQUER THE HEROINES

MrYoungLogan
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MrYoungLogan
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Author here... Thanks for the review. I am grateful that you are liking my novel... And about the POV of the heroines, I think you are somewhat right. But in my opinion, I think these heroine's POVs are necessary... In Komi-san's case, the part where 'she became friends with Shikimori' and in Shikimori-san s case, the part that 'how she started liking the Volleyball as well as the mention of the 'manga'...'... So, please continue reading my novel...🙂🙂 [Spoiler: The MANGA will play a big role in future... ]

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MrYoungLogan
MrYoungLoganAuthor

Author here. Here is my honest review. 1). Interactions: Well, the interactions are not that great. I know. But I will try to improve it soon. 2) Grammar: Hmm, the grammar sucks, okay. But I guess many of you can understand what I am trying to deliver to you guys. 3) Heroine nature: Yes, this is an important point. Most of the readers find Horikita's behaviour different from her usual self, and some of you maybe find the same with Shikimori and Komi. So, listen, I will not fully copy their personality as I will make some changes, okay? I think I have, maybe, answered some of your doubts. And don't worry, if you have any other doubts, ask me. I will try to answer it for you guys. BTW, THANKS FOR GIVING YOUR PRECIOUS TIME TO READ MY NOVEL...

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John_Wick_6299
John_Wick_6299Lv1

Read upto chapter 20. The writing is fine... The character interaction are interesting, well I find it though... The main character is just behaving like a simp (well, I can't say anything right now about it though), as I am still somewhat confused about his character... Overall, I am really loving this novel... [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

1yr
cult
cultLv4

Honest review. Interesting premise, MC's past is interesting and want to know more about it, I like the whole white room sub plot, would be fun seeing him interact with Ayanokoji in the future, him helping people in the past is an interesting plot aswell. Interactions between mc and heroine can be quite bland sometimes, different POV chapters can be summarized in only 1 chapter, kinda boring writing the same thing only from a different pov, should of been author's POV, depending on what it is. All in All, fun novel to read. Recommend.

8mth
Shankss
ShankssLv4

I just read till the latest chapter, and tho the interaction between characters are kinda bland it is not that bad but I have two requests for the author. First, I hope you actually develop MC and his girl's relationship and not do pokemon harem. Second, please don't make the harem too big I think the max amount of girls you can probably develop is 5 and past that it will be really hard to develop their character.

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