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ShadexRay
ShadexRayLv51yr
2023-05-25 17:48

Alright, this novel has a lot of untapped potential. Incorporating the Indian Mythological figures gives a refreshing view and taste. I'm sure the readers will find it interesting and unique. My only slight qualm is that the writing quality could be improved, albeit slightly and almost negligible. Also, it would be great if you could translate the Hindi/Sanskrit dialogues into English to well-accommodate the readers. The pace is neither too fast nor too slow. The characters could be better described in terms of emotions, appearances and action. But, keep up the good work, author!

The Rakshas Apocalypse

LordShivaStories
4.7
9 Chs

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thanks so much for pointing out the mistakes

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Chase_Xavier_123
Chase_Xavier_123Lv3

Like indian mythology this is the book for you. Writing Quality- Great I can't find faults with it. The chapters are long 1st pov is used very well. The author is also knowledgeable about the indian mythology. Story Development - It is slow not rushed at all in the first two chapter but you understand what's going on as we first get to know the Mc's normal life which is not quite normal since he is the popular guy. But All of sudden we get these Raksha and Indian mythology which we were there for. The mythology element is...I love it. I can't put in words how much I love it. Character Design - Mc is kinda "I know i am great catch type", but he is a teen quite normal for him to be that way. Would love to see you add other characters and gods. Adi is a great friend though football and chess at the same time. God knows if his surname is Sharma Updating stability - Quite great I am satisfied with the quality of chapter so I am ready to wait for future chapter. 🥺 World background - That's the best part of this novel it has the element of action, supernatural, mystery, indian mythology. I love the kali yuga references and other reference. There is really nothing I can put my finger to find fault on. I will be waiting for the upcoming action scene between the Students and the rakshasa. As it will be the writers challenge. Good luck 👍

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BongoHead
BongoHeadLv11

Who doesn't enjoy diving into the realm of mythological stories? I've come across countless manhua/manwha with cultivation themes and manga featuring Chinese or Egyptian references. However, the current chapters that explore Indian Mythology have been truly captivating. It's refreshing to witness such a great story unfold. I can't help but imagine how wonderful it would be if the author had some sort of real-life system to release daily chapters. That way, we could savor this amazing narrative on a regular basis."

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Jokerbud
JokerbudLv2

Awesome! I gotta say that this novel has a lot of potential! I would suggest the author to phrase his sentences and improve his grammar a bit. The Hindhu Mythology is a wide and interesting topic, I'm happy that someone is writing an entire novel based on that as even Omniscient Readers viewpoint only had a small part of Hindhu mythology. The one thing I would suggest the author is to translate the Sanskrit dialogues completely into English since most of the western readers can't understand it.

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LordShivaStories
LordShivaStoriesAuthor

I will just give the photo of the three rakshas, so yeah just going to write random things which can allow me to give the review so yep yeah I know. First rakshasa photo

1yr
Sweet_xiyue
Sweet_xiyueLv3

As a new author the story is quite interesting as i told i love zombies. I can see a potential in you. Although there can be improvement in both the grammar and spelling. other than that it's quite good.keep it up.

1yr
sleepingpeacefully
sleepingpeacefullyLv3

A well written book with good ideas and I really like it based on the hindu myths and hoping to read more .

1yr
Nuno_Sineiro
Nuno_SineiroLv3

too early to day much.. but promising 1st chap.. looking forward for the rest

1yr
mahe_ale_aba
mahe_ale_abaLv2

the indian mythology description had me hooked its beautifully written as i am from east asian side i know this well keep it up cant wait for more chapters[img=recommend]

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theword_witch
theword_witchLv2

A good read for any mythology reader. Simply put its hindu mythology meets anime, it has something for all the readers to relate to. It has potential to be great if the writing is a little dramatic and intense for certain parts. Since, this combination isn't common the readers will have high expectations... Keep updating

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MidsummerDaybreak
MidsummerDaybreakLv1

Well then. To tell the truth, this story was surprisingly good. It has a potential from its premise. The pace is not too fast either. Now the lacking part is the execution of the idea. If I can say, the narrative is lacking in description and too casual. You need to put a difference between the narratives and dialogues to make the story more beautiful. As for the characters, well, honestly, I can't find anything to make them stand out and they also seem to lack emotions. Perhaps you can develop the characters more to make them more charming and interesting. Wishing you a pleasant journey :)

1yr
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