While the story was interesting, the grammar is awful. It reads like somebody trying to text but has a character limit for their cell phone plan. Not only that, but the premise kinda killed it for me. Neville being the Boy-Who-Lived isn't terrible, but the Author decided to make the trio focus (Neville, Hermione, and Harry) similar to team 7 in Naruto. Neville has crazy amounts of power, Hermione is the talented one, and Harry just has control. Author really made his version of Harry turn into Sakura, which explains all the monologues and sass. It was all Harry's CHA moments.
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thank you! that was a... surprisingly non bias review
Ummm... do you somehow have access to future chapters? Because until now there isn't a Harry/Neville/Hermione trio. Or did author rewrite the story in the last 8 days?
Nah, at the point where I stopped reading that felt like it was gonna be the three characters that are focused on. Like Ron would have a more background role, but when it comes to large plot events the three that would play the biggest roles would be Harry, Neville, and Hermione.Author could have changed up the story or kept that focus, I didn't stick around to find out.
DaoOfCookies:Ummm... do you somehow have access to future chapters? Because until now there isn't a Harry/Neville/Hermione trio. Or did author rewrite the story in the last 8 days?
