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2023-06-05 02:58

just checking is there a patreon for more chaps

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unfortunately no. I Don't think I could keep up a healthy schedule and I don't really want people paying for my work, maybe in the future.

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First and foremost I intend for this review to be constructive for the author and to hope that this helps to improve his writing no matter how little. I gave 2 of the five categories a 1 and it was intentional. I like the other three very much so I gave them a 5. I love the concept of the cheat as its unique and also like the pacing for now (chapter 26) as the heroes have only started 5ish years ago so a loong time to get to darkside and other villains, so the small time skips are appreciated. Here is what I hate about the story: the MC's character and how he behaves. the DC verse (for who can realize it) is a grueling world, one where committing major crimes and breaking the Geneva convention is a morning cup of coffee. Our MC has the knowledge of the DC verse and should know about this. Yet he still CHOOSES to get plopped into this verse, and CHOOSES to move to Gotham city with a happy go lucky/everything will go swell if I keep cutting hair attitude? What do I mean by this? You have to understand that he somehow got into the flow of things and goes to a convention and "sees" some one he is close to die/sacrifice herself, therefore "losing" her. Isnt this too lax for some one who CHOSE to be in this verse? I get what the author is trying to do, he is trying to do something I HATE in novels and that is character development (sponge bob rainbow gif) (P.S PERSONALLY I hate character development, I mean why should I see someone else's struggles while I am already struggling. But I digress). But it gets kinda weird too, the guy seems to get a switch flipped and goes all- imma make you regret this cause you gonna kill my girl - after he catches penguin? I mean should that switch not already be flipped when he is born into DC? Why does something need go wrong before it gets flipped? I think the time stone/power thing is too much a safety net and an unnecessary one that the MC gets considering his already OP powers. Is it supposed to be his crutch every time something goes wrong? Also his happy go lucky attitude is also kinda weird if he is going to get involved with Harley, I mean torture is her fun time and if he gets involved with her, the only attitude I can see that relationship working with is if the MC goes in with the mindset of "I can fix her, all I need to do is cut her hair.". Here is how I think the MC should be, keep the hair cutting cheat and make it a hobby, but give him some background something like in his past life that gives him some grit to stand up to the threats that are in DC, for eg: he was a criminal and the only solace he got was the barber old man and reading comics, novels and watching anime. Make it so that he has a cautious nature to him and a 6th sense of something might go wrong here, but he got the tools to deal with it. Make him be funny, but have an edge to him that can handle a psycho like Harley. Get rid of his time cheat, its too much of a crutch. Make him a bruce wayne/tony stark level genius instead so that he can use his hair related powers better, i mean he can make hair into ANYTHING, he literally has infinite resources, he is Momo (from bnha) on crack. If anyone wants to correct me write a reply to this review, but be prepared to able to be digest my responses and not just hate on my ideas instead of being able understand my point of view. Hope this helps you author-san.

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4.9
89 Chs