Review Detail of Adhitya_Aji_Wibowo in MARVEL: I AM TOAA GRANDSON

Too painful to read and has too many weird points. 1. You really need an editor and proofreader. I know you're not native english speaker and I did not meant to be rude but I have to say that your english is bad. 2. The character and world building is very lacking. You need to elaborate more, ie. explain more about the mc. If your mc is the grandson of Lucifer, while he is a cosmic force powerhouse, i don't think he is one above all. 3. Is this rewrite of 2 previous similar story? I think I checked them back then, "Dimensional Chat Group Of Creation and Destruction" are the titles if I'm not mistaken. With Sullivan as the MC, but with different member. I did not understand what you are trying to do but I believe correcting your writing into something more readable should be your priority instead of doing that.