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Eli_readerLv18mth
2024-04-06 00:37

I'll be honest, I'm here because I read the beginning of your other work and I just finished this one. My honest reaction to this work based on story alone would be a 3/10 BUT! I think I would put it at a 5/10 for four factors that this work has. 1.- It has a concept that I have only seen in a Chinese mlt, which is donations (and well, the author of the Chinese fanfic already had another work that had followers so this concept turned out very well) 2.- I know very well that you are just starting out and mistakes are inevitable, as readers we simply want a deep reading but sometimes we forget that not everyone has the experience to make a story and they simply judge it because it is not to their liking. taste. 3.- The comedy of the story would not be considered the funniest but it still fulfills its function and the interpretation of your fights or simple objectives does not stand out...... or so it seemed until a certain person came to sweeten and highlight everything what your work had to offer (and I think I had already met it on another platform "if I talk about you TheAnPlayer2 or should I call you Luck_TAP2") 4.- the people who stayed and enjoyed this story not only added their comments but also highlighted what this story can give and believe it or not, a story is not only read without further ado but most readers see the funniest and most curious comments from other readers. I'm not really here to judge or just say that I'm a critic when it comes to fanfic, but I just like to express myself, I'm new to this platform and I liked that your story was one of the first stories. . . . I had the opportunity to read. pdt: you must give a big thank you to those who followed this story especially to Kind_Chara who seems to be the first to support you and to TheAnPlayer2 for dedicating part of his time to creating representations and "Memes", also highlighting that he always helps those who start with their stories " Thank you for the support you gave me Luck_TAP2, I really appreciate it."

Reincarnated in Touhou with the Trolling system

Blender_Person
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Blender_Person
Blender_PersonAuthor

I will take this into account. Thank you 👍

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Fragasile
FragasileLv4

This has got to be the most cringe I’ve ever felt reading a touhou fic. This is written so badly that the only way to redeem it is to rewrite everything from scratch, as it has no redeeming qualities whatsoever to speak of. Writing quality: On par with the worst Wattpad amateur fanfics that was given zero thought or any proofreading. Did you even read what you’ve written? There’s no way you live in the USA right now with the abysmal English being used to write this. Characters: Horrible, just plain horrible. The MC is annoying in the worst ways, an obvious archetype of the “millennial writing* protags that just won’t shut up and let the story flow. Your depiction of the touhou girls aren’t any better either, it’s so barebones and derived from fanon lore that it makes me question if you’ve even engaged in the official manga or written works. Plot: What plot? It’s all just a bunch of nonsense and you copying the story of the games, except you make it worse. It’s written like a script with no real sense of immersion, something akin to an elementary schooler writing a story. The way you present the lore is done so badly that even an AI could make something more accurate. Your trolling system barely has any trolling being done too, you do a bunch of meta and 4th wall talk like it’s somehow humorous? Nothing about this is the least bit funny, the worst kind of marvel writing I’ve seen to date. If I could, I’d rate this story a 0 or a negative number from how bad it is.

11mth

dndjdbdd
dndjdbddLv13

I like it, it's got some personality. if the author really keeps his promise of weekly updates then this will turn out pretty alright

1yr
Asriel_IsDreemurr
Asriel_IsDreemurrLv4

Great story, I just have one question about the mc.Would he?

12mth
DvD_007
DvD_007Lv5

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