I really like the creativity of this novel. I enjoy reading the different trails and the thought that went into every detail. But, I wish that the author would make a better effort to clean up and polish his work so that what they have imagined is clearly conveyed through the effective use of Grammer and vocabulary. This is my personal opinion, but maybe the author should focus on the advancement of the story, rather than spending 2 to 3 chapters explaining intimate nights. I just feel that the mature scenes don't need that much detail, and maybe you could shorten it down so that we can get back into the story and enjoy the book. There are more ways to show romance than in the bedroom. Other than that, great detail and good luck on the future chapters.
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LIKEI do agree with most of what you said, and the reason for most of the things you mentioned is that, at the time, I was quite inexperienced with writing. In fact, I was totally inexperienced. Also, polishing a webnovel is quite difficult since I write new chapters every day. Editing chapters to their full potential isn't really something that is feasible with my current schedule. Either way, thanks for the review. I appreciate it!