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2024-10-14 21:56

Not your typical Author review praising their own workd, but instead me just tearing mine to bits. For one, the writing Quality is , I think, above average. That's not to say it's bad, but it's not exactly the best either, but I do want to improve all aspects of my writing, from how I describe things, to how people interact. The development of the story is a little wack, not gonna lie. I'm kinda just writing everything on the fly for the most part. I have goals in mind, it's just I have to fill in the gaps, and I think I'm doing it well whilst writing an entertaining story in the process Character designs are bad, I will admit. I think being the Author and understanding all the intricacies with my characters does blind me into not articulating all of the intricacies with my characters. In regards to the world, you learn bits of it here and there and the world building slowly expands the further you go into the novel, exposing you to more of how it works and why certain things are the way they are. Though the way that I did some of it could be better. Overall, I think this is a nice little read for those that seem interested and are willing to look past some of my faults and bad writing skills. Hope you enjoy your reading experience. That's all!

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