Review Detail of Throning in Harry Potter / Highschool DxD : A deal with the devil
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Did you read Harry Potter? Because you made them learn wingardium leviosa two time and made some disperency there and there to make the plot. Like healing bones in two month when regrowing them take a night.
Harry Potter / Highschool DxD : A deal with the devil
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You may be correct but you really could say it a bit nicer. Just remember that the author writes this fan fiction in his free time and does not earn any money with this. And do you really think he would want to continue the fan fiction when every review looks like that. Moreover, it is still an alternative universe with a cross over so the author can kind of design everything like he wants to without problems. In case you are reading this, author, i really like this fan fiction please continue writing it. Although I am still at chapter 26. Xd
All I said is that some mistakes can make a story less enjoyable.The story got a good beginning with a original idea of where the story could go.But since the school begun, the author seem to get some difficulties with the story or how to continue it. I stopped where the ravenclaw quidditch team loose a player so I don't know what happen next.
P0lar1s:You may be correct but you really could say it a bit nicer. Just remember that the author writes this fan fiction in his free time and does not earn any money with this. And do you really think he would want to continue the fan fiction when every review looks like that. Moreover, it is still an alternative universe with a cross over so the author can kind of design everything like he wants to without problems. In case you are reading this, author, i really like this fan fiction please continue writing it. Although I am still at chapter 26. Xd
U aren't wrong. I think author had the broad strokes of both the world's but isn't really able to connect them that well. The moment Hogwarts started it seems like he is winging everything out. Not to say somethings feel like written there just to increase the word count.
Throning:All I said is that some mistakes can make a story less enjoyable.The story got a good beginning with a original idea of where the story could go.But since the school begun, the author seem to get some difficulties with the story or how to continue it. I stopped where the ravenclaw quidditch team loose a player so I don't know what happen next.