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bluerabyssLv31yr
2023-05-05 07:25

The story is well written and up to a good start. I dunno, I just noticed some inconsistencies...馃槄馃槄 First one is that I thought the Adventurer's Guilds offer free lodging to the members so how come the Elijah need to use 1 guild point so that he can stay in the dorms? One more thing is that his first mission should be rewarded with 10 gold coins but he only received 5 gold coins and with only 1 guild point... shouldn't be received like atleast 2 or maybe 3 guild point? 馃槄馃槄馃槄 Idk why I noticed those things but so far the story is good (a little slow like how I write my stories) but the story itself is good. Keep it up author! 馃挭馃挭

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Aurora_Ayaka
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Thank you for pointing out the things I need to edit in the story! I'll try to fix the things you said as soon as possible [img=recommend]

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bluerabyssLv3

You are welcome!

Aurora_Ayaka:Thank you for pointing out the things I need to edit in the story! I'll try to fix the things you said as soon as possible [img=recommend]
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