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Brandon_5903
Brandon_5903Lv21yr
2023-07-04 20:41

From what I have read the first chapter creates a good foundation for the story to be built up upon. The characters are described well. But at least for me the description of the world itself should be flushed out more. The first chapter sets up several intriguing story pieces as the parents and the experiment the MC went. It would befit the story in saying it's in the future this would give more creative freedom to work with more sci fi ideas and concepts that may befit your overall story like alien races, planets or other kinds of things that would give your story a more distinctive feel. But i think it's a good story and we'll be sure to keep up with it

Surviving the Apocalypse in the Multiverse

MooingNymph
4.7
30 Chs

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MooingNymph
MooingNymphAuthor

Thanks Brandon I'm actually planning to talk about that down the line.

1yr
Brandon_5903
Brandon_5903Lv2

your welcome were you able to review my book as well

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MooingNymph
MooingNymphAuthor

Hey man sorry for the late reply, I had a family emergency and everything got ruined so I'm doing all of the reviews tomorrow😅

Brandon_5903:your welcome were you able to review my book as well
1yr
MooingNymph
MooingNymphAuthor

I just finished reviewing it!

1yr
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MooingNymph
MooingNymphAuthor

Mr. Author here!Please give my book a chance, maybe leave a review and some votes🫣Otherwise, I will be re-reading my chapters as I go along to enhance the reader experience and to correct issues or to add things that are suggested in paragraph comments so yeah add this to your library if you read PLEASE!

1yr

Lo_rezi00
Lo_rezi00Lv2

although I've read only the first 2 chapters I'm already into this book..I'm loving the mystery and the way the author detailed his workkeep the flags flying 😁

1yr
IvanelaSalove
IvanelaSaloveLv11

Congratulations on getting contracted, Moo! This novel is definitely a must read [img=recommend] Its elements will get you hooked, and you won't even realize you have already reached the last chapter. Check this novel out!

1yr
WRCRhythm
WRCRhythmLv1

Honestly, a rare gem. Solid characters with solid development. Perfectly paced and packs a power, engaging progression. Expecting to read more along the course of this fantastic journey.

1yr
DARK_DEKU
DARK_DEKULv4

Overall I will say this is a great book please keep it up

1yr
femme_fatale
femme_fataleLv1

To tell you the truth, it's really an interesting story! I like how the story goes and the plot is very captivating. And a main character with cubby features is rare. Keep it up!

1yr
IvanelaSalove
IvanelaSaloveLv11

First, the synopsis can be improved, especially the first two sentences because when I read it, it confused me a little bit. I have to read the paragraph 5 times before understanding it lol. As for the contents, the grammars and punctuations are good. The way the author described the scenes are smooth, but one thing that threw me off was the first chapter. Personally, it was confusing since perhaps the synopsis didn't introduce the important elements that could be read in the novel. As I was reading, it felt like it was too abrupt, and it didn't let me process the character's background or something like that. It's just my opinion, so do what's best for your novel. Other than that, the author described the scenes with simple words that I could easily understand, so I was able to visualize it properly. Overall, this novel has potential and I look forward to the mc's development [img=recommend]

1yr
NewbieJimjim
NewbieJimjimLv3

Even though there is not much information about MC past life and introduction on first chapter is a little bit lack of detail, but the writing is easy to understand and the story is look promising. Keep up your good work!

1yr
Shadow_Library_
Shadow_Library_Lv4

amazing potential for the plot keep it up and the writing is nice and their is always a chance to improve

1yr
ProPug
ProPugLv3

Really intriguing premise, keep it up and looking forward to more things from you! This story has a lot going for it and I really hope this blows up!

1yr
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