The story is not good it is the very very generic and the mc just get everything given to him there is no struggle plus You do not go into detail enoug. It just seems like your honestly lazy after all for his death you did pretty much just say he died and moved on. You need to go more in depth build the relationships better. The only redeeming quality so far is the update stability.
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