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MonosirLv21yr
2023-04-22 05:34

Going to be completely honest, not the greatest. Your first chapter wasnโ€™t even 100 words long. No character/world development. A good chuck of the text is just the system, it makes me not want to read at all.

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Sorry for disappointing you. As I have written there there that this is my first novel so it might not be that good. And about that first ch I thought that it may be a little summary but it got converted into chapter my mistake . Then I asked my first reader to tell me how many words should I write he said about 1000-1500 and I'm trying to keep it up. And When it comes to world explanation than it will develop together with main character like you are exploring it yourself. And character development never starts from first chapter only. Also THANKS ๐Ÿ‘ for reading and giving your suggestions I appreciate it โ˜บ๏ธ

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