Trying to rate this story accurately is impossible. The writing quality is just all over the place with so many grammar and coherence problems. It's hard to make sense of anything, which makes it impossible to properly evaluate other important aspects like the plot, characters, and world background. I can't even tell if there's a real story hiding in this jumbled mess. If I could, I would give the writing quality an even lower rating because, honestly, it's pretty bad.
kamidemond
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LIKEI don't know what to tell you, maybe try using ChatGPT or something similar to fix most of your mistakes; if you really want to write this story, using external help(ex: ChatGPT) may be a good solution until you feel like your mastery of english is at a good enough level.
kamidemond:sorry
Aledamonkey:I don't know what to tell you, maybe try using ChatGPT or something similar to fix most of your mistakes; if you really want to write this story, using external help(ex: ChatGPT) may be a good solution until you feel like your mastery of english is at a good enough level.