Finally, after 15 chapters, I'm here to give an introductory review. First and foremost, you probably need to read 20+ plus chapters before you can develop an opinion about the story. I wrote it in such a way that the first 15 chapters makes a small volume that has quick-paced action that introduces the power system and the world at large. . . . Now let's get to the review. 1) Writing Quality: - It is one of my best works yet, and I pride myself on having a good writing style. nothing more needs to be said. 2) Updates: - You are guaranteed at least 5 - 7 chaps a week. I'm looking to increase that to 14 chaps a week, but I will see if I can do that on a regular basis. 3) Story Development: - This is something I can mention with pride. The story has varying paces. Sometimes, it feels fast-paced, and sometimes, it goes slow. - It all depends on the current arc and volume. I did that to match the realism of the world. 4) Character Design: - I can't say it is absolutely phenomenal, but the main cast is lovable. We have Reve, Ren, and Calen, all with contrasty personalities and backgrounds 5) World Background: - Another phenomenal world-building from me. Yes, I said that - The world of Earth is riddled with cosmic horror and diabolic influences. This characteristic has seemingly weaved itself into the power system and the ways of the world. We have cults, religions, and factions all vying for control of the world. We have a past covered in mystery. And we have abilities that are not the usual like the first ability we are introduced to stop the target's body with just sight. Now, it might seem regular but the execution makes it very much different. I took inspiration from various horror works like Lord of the Mystery, Lovecraftian Mythos, and many more. One thing I have to say is to take ur time when reading. I guarantee it will be worth it
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LIKENot to be that guy, but I'm kinda confused. This honestly feels like the second installment in a series (is it?). We don't get hardly any background on the character, and what little we do get explains nothing. I was hoping it would explain more as it goes, and I did get some answers, but for the most part, I just have way more questions. I'm 18 chapters in btw. Other than that, I think the setting is interesting, and the characters have potential 👍
The mc's story hasn't been fully told. Sure, he has had some adventures in Arcadia, but that is not really the focus of this novel since I'm bringing in a fresh plate. Think of it like a transmigration. The mc is venturing into a new world with a new power system. Everything is fresh. Most of the mysteries are intentional. Apart from the mc and his backstory, no other characters from my previous works are introduced. Although, I'm not sure how it feels like from ur side. Tell me what parts were confusing and I will work on it. Thanks.
uncledavie:Not to be that guy, but I'm kinda confused. This honestly feels like the second installment in a series (is it?). We don't get hardly any background on the character, and what little we do get explains nothing. I was hoping it would explain more as it goes, and I did get some answers, but for the most part, I just have way more questions. I'm 18 chapters in btw. Other than that, I think the setting is interesting, and the characters have potential 👍
ok 1. You mention MC is from earth and then goes to Arcadia, then from Arcadia to Taxan and then back to earth, but like it is a different earth or something. Why? I don't mean to tell you how to write your story. you're the creator here, but it feels a bit unnecessarily convoluted. Also, you only briefly go over this whole ordeal, so I'm left to wonder the logistics of it. I assume he died on earth then was reincarnated as a non-human in Arcadia then transmigrateded to taxan and earth through some spacial warp thing. 2. You introduce a lot of terms without expanding on them. Honestly, this could be easily fixed by adding them to your glossary. The list of terms that I feel could use some explaining are: Titan Gaeryn Nexus Cat Cambion Demon/Devil and maybe a couple of others that I've forgotten 3. I appreciate that you wanted to begin the story on a high note to grab the audiences attention and fill in the mysteries as you go, but your story has a relatively unique setting with a rather loosely defined power system. If it were just your standard isekai/fantasy novel that relies heavily on tropes, I wouldn't be confused at all, but it's not. Maybe consider slowing it down a bit in order to give us just a bit more world building and explain some of the more key terms. What I would do if I were you is add a prologue that shows us Reves final moments on earth and first few moments in Arcadia and then instead of doing a mini 15 chapter volume I'd just make it a full 30 to 50 chapter volume where I start with Reve being transmigrated from taxan to earth and appearing in the forest, meeting Ren, getting roped in by Val etc. With the climax of the first volume being the fight between Ravriel and Zariel. Well done on the fight scene, btw. Like I said your the creator here you can take your story wherever you want, so if you want to leave the MCs past more of a mystery, than I would just say to leave it a complete mystery, giving incomplete info only helps to confuse the reader (like me). However, I don't really recommend this approach because the past does matter to the plot. You have the MCs relationship with the crimson creed, the titans, the mc actually being a titan, and all the other knowledge and experience of Reve that gives him the ability to be an asset and threat, ie him unlocking the box with the arcanist circle thing. There are two novels with a similar setting to yours that I recommend you read if you haven't already: LOTM and The Fake Sovereign. These novels illustrate why it's a good idea to take your time with the world building, and maybe you'll get some other inspiration in regards to your story. That's all from me, lol
Purple_Khaos:The mc's story hasn't been fully told. Sure, he has had some adventures in Arcadia, but that is not really the focus of this novel since I'm bringing in a fresh plate. Think of it like a transmigration. The mc is venturing into a new world with a new power system. Everything is fresh. Most of the mysteries are intentional. Apart from the mc and his backstory, no other characters from my previous works are introduced. Although, I'm not sure how it feels like from ur side. Tell me what parts were confusing and I will work on it. Thanks.
The Forsaken Sovereign* not the Fake Sovereign lol
uncledavie:ok 1. You mention MC is from earth and then goes to Arcadia, then from Arcadia to Taxan and then back to earth, but like it is a different earth or something. Why? I don't mean to tell you how to write your story. you're the creator here, but it feels a bit unnecessarily convoluted. Also, you only briefly go over this whole ordeal, so I'm left to wonder the logistics of it. I assume he died on earth then was reincarnated as a non-human in Arcadia then transmigrateded to taxan and earth through some spacial warp thing. 2. You introduce a lot of terms without expanding on them. Honestly, this could be easily fixed by adding them to your glossary. The list of terms that I feel could use some explaining are: Titan Gaeryn Nexus Cat Cambion Demon/Devil and maybe a couple of others that I've forgotten 3. I appreciate that you wanted to begin the story on a high note to grab the audiences attention and fill in the mysteries as you go, but your story has a relatively unique setting with a rather loosely defined power system. If it were just your standard isekai/fantasy novel that relies heavily on tropes, I wouldn't be confused at all, but it's not. Maybe consider slowing it down a bit in order to give us just a bit more world building and explain some of the more key terms. What I would do if I were you is add a prologue that shows us Reves final moments on earth and first few moments in Arcadia and then instead of doing a mini 15 chapter volume I'd just make it a full 30 to 50 chapter volume where I start with Reve being transmigrated from taxan to earth and appearing in the forest, meeting Ren, getting roped in by Val etc. With the climax of the first volume being the fight between Ravriel and Zariel. Well done on the fight scene, btw. Like I said your the creator here you can take your story wherever you want, so if you want to leave the MCs past more of a mystery, than I would just say to leave it a complete mystery, giving incomplete info only helps to confuse the reader (like me). However, I don't really recommend this approach because the past does matter to the plot. You have the MCs relationship with the crimson creed, the titans, the mc actually being a titan, and all the other knowledge and experience of Reve that gives him the ability to be an asset and threat, ie him unlocking the box with the arcanist circle thing. There are two novels with a similar setting to yours that I recommend you read if you haven't already: LOTM and The Fake Sovereign. These novels illustrate why it's a good idea to take your time with the world building, and maybe you'll get some other inspiration in regards to your story. That's all from me, lol
Thanks, I will see what I can do
uncledavie:ok 1. You mention MC is from earth and then goes to Arcadia, then from Arcadia to Taxan and then back to earth, but like it is a different earth or something. Why? I don't mean to tell you how to write your story. you're the creator here, but it feels a bit unnecessarily convoluted. Also, you only briefly go over this whole ordeal, so I'm left to wonder the logistics of it. I assume he died on earth then was reincarnated as a non-human in Arcadia then transmigrateded to taxan and earth through some spacial warp thing. 2. You introduce a lot of terms without expanding on them. Honestly, this could be easily fixed by adding them to your glossary. The list of terms that I feel could use some explaining are: Titan Gaeryn Nexus Cat Cambion Demon/Devil and maybe a couple of others that I've forgotten 3. I appreciate that you wanted to begin the story on a high note to grab the audiences attention and fill in the mysteries as you go, but your story has a relatively unique setting with a rather loosely defined power system. If it were just your standard isekai/fantasy novel that relies heavily on tropes, I wouldn't be confused at all, but it's not. Maybe consider slowing it down a bit in order to give us just a bit more world building and explain some of the more key terms. What I would do if I were you is add a prologue that shows us Reves final moments on earth and first few moments in Arcadia and then instead of doing a mini 15 chapter volume I'd just make it a full 30 to 50 chapter volume where I start with Reve being transmigrated from taxan to earth and appearing in the forest, meeting Ren, getting roped in by Val etc. With the climax of the first volume being the fight between Ravriel and Zariel. Well done on the fight scene, btw. Like I said your the creator here you can take your story wherever you want, so if you want to leave the MCs past more of a mystery, than I would just say to leave it a complete mystery, giving incomplete info only helps to confuse the reader (like me). However, I don't really recommend this approach because the past does matter to the plot. You have the MCs relationship with the crimson creed, the titans, the mc actually being a titan, and all the other knowledge and experience of Reve that gives him the ability to be an asset and threat, ie him unlocking the box with the arcanist circle thing. There are two novels with a similar setting to yours that I recommend you read if you haven't already: LOTM and The Fake Sovereign. These novels illustrate why it's a good idea to take your time with the world building, and maybe you'll get some other inspiration in regards to your story. That's all from me, lol
i have created a glossary page, and the next volumes are already planned for worldbuilding. thanks for the advice
uncledavie:ok 1. You mention MC is from earth and then goes to Arcadia, then from Arcadia to Taxan and then back to earth, but like it is a different earth or something. Why? I don't mean to tell you how to write your story. you're the creator here, but it feels a bit unnecessarily convoluted. Also, you only briefly go over this whole ordeal, so I'm left to wonder the logistics of it. I assume he died on earth then was reincarnated as a non-human in Arcadia then transmigrateded to taxan and earth through some spacial warp thing. 2. You introduce a lot of terms without expanding on them. Honestly, this could be easily fixed by adding them to your glossary. The list of terms that I feel could use some explaining are: Titan Gaeryn Nexus Cat Cambion Demon/Devil and maybe a couple of others that I've forgotten 3. I appreciate that you wanted to begin the story on a high note to grab the audiences attention and fill in the mysteries as you go, but your story has a relatively unique setting with a rather loosely defined power system. If it were just your standard isekai/fantasy novel that relies heavily on tropes, I wouldn't be confused at all, but it's not. Maybe consider slowing it down a bit in order to give us just a bit more world building and explain some of the more key terms. What I would do if I were you is add a prologue that shows us Reves final moments on earth and first few moments in Arcadia and then instead of doing a mini 15 chapter volume I'd just make it a full 30 to 50 chapter volume where I start with Reve being transmigrated from taxan to earth and appearing in the forest, meeting Ren, getting roped in by Val etc. With the climax of the first volume being the fight between Ravriel and Zariel. Well done on the fight scene, btw. Like I said your the creator here you can take your story wherever you want, so if you want to leave the MCs past more of a mystery, than I would just say to leave it a complete mystery, giving incomplete info only helps to confuse the reader (like me). However, I don't really recommend this approach because the past does matter to the plot. You have the MCs relationship with the crimson creed, the titans, the mc actually being a titan, and all the other knowledge and experience of Reve that gives him the ability to be an asset and threat, ie him unlocking the box with the arcanist circle thing. There are two novels with a similar setting to yours that I recommend you read if you haven't already: LOTM and The Fake Sovereign. These novels illustrate why it's a good idea to take your time with the world building, and maybe you'll get some other inspiration in regards to your story. That's all from me, lol