Review Detail of LuRai in The Silver General: An Unlikely Love Story

Writing Quality: I am not a big fan of the first-person view just because it has many flaws. But you did a great job. That being said try to keep it to first person, I noticed it switch mid-way a couple of times which can become confusing. The flashbacks though rather than pov you can in the third person (just a suggestion for ease of writing) Also there's an overabundance of details for your first-person view, details are great but keep in mind the reality of someone talking or telling a story, it might not be as in-depth as you're doing. Story development: loving that everything isn't going super fast, definitely allows for character growth and development, loving the gore! Character design: love love love the characters, so adorable. I love the cold personality obscured by childhood trauma and the innocent unknowing process. one of my favorite troupes. Overall great job looking forward to the next chapters :D