keke171Lv41yr

2023-04-12 07:58

(google translate) it's not a bad story, if you don't think about it too much it's a pleasant read it's a very wish-fulfillment story, the MC is very op, that in itself is not a problem, but it lacks comedy to complement MC op, and the MC is superior to everything and everyone in power and seniority to the point of his family relationships and past making all characters his juniors makes things a little weird, it's like someone reincarnating as Adam in some world and calling everyone children because they are all descendants of him that aside, the powers are interesting, they contain a bit of originality, using references from other stories to create MC powers, like lord of Mysteries, it's cool, but at the same time redundant because he has many and at once, you can't even tell which power is stronger, the first 5 chapters are info dump of powers and the 6th is the transition to the beginning of the story, the writing quality is good, idk about grammar because I use a translator and it kinda messes or corrects everything automatically for now, this is all I can describe as there are only 20 chaps at the time of this review, in conclusion, the story had to be slower, and more detailed as several comedy scenes, conversations, and others were cut, an example is Doudou arriving, there was hardly a single dialogue from him, and he's with shuhang already when senior white awakens, which is MC little brother, I expected the MC to play a trick or something on Doudou, create the illusion of a strong male dog trying to seduce him or something when he approached Shuhang for the first time, sort of foreshadows his unhappy fate. a slower story can also make the romance feel deeper. finally, the story isn't bad, although it's not stellar either, I believe the author should focus on the comedy, the chat, and the interaction (mainly funny ones) between characters, because with an MC being op, it makes the story in need of an intense focus on another entertaining area, anyway, a good book for the first time writing, I wish you the best of luck author

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