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LaziestMan
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2023-04-04 03:16

Hello everyone i have a New novel named " i crossed over with Immortal System" I am sure you will like it

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Billy_Castellanos
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Coming here for the cliche, rather interesting premise. The writing quality is decent overall, but could benefit from some trimming of unnecessary or overly long paragraphs to allow readers to draw their own inferences. There were a few errors, such as misplaced pronouns, but they were relatively minor and likely to be corrected by the author upon my review. (Mind you, I'm not a native English speaker myself. So, I might be mistaken about the grammar, and you should just check it out yourself.) The story pacing may be slow, but not to the point of being boring. The author has gradually revealed information about the world throughout the 20 chapters so far, even though only three hours have passed in the novel's world. Although it's slower than some other novels, it's still better than those that fail to reveal any background information after several chapters. So far, the author has introduced us to two distinct entities for the system in the novel. One of them was a typical system, which functioned passively without the ability to communicate. The other was a genie, acting as a customer service representative for the system and assisting players when they experienced difficulties. The update rate was decent, with at least two chapters being released per day. While I don't have any issues with this aspect, I believe it would be even better if the author could release more chapters daily. P.S (I reserve the right to change my review after reading more chapters, so I encourage the author to maintain consistency in their work.)

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