Review Detail of Arion_Sturmklinge in Harry Potter: The God of Magic (BEING REWRITTEN)

Well the writing is good but the story has an almost limitless amount an logic errors and plot holes. And some of the most basic things don't make any logical sens, like the Occlumency for example he needs to be older to used fully even if he is a reborn legendary wizard. And he didn't get him self immortality.