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Emotionaldamager
EmotionaldamagerLv11yr
2023-07-16 00:26

Writing could have been better there some situations that feel cringe πŸ˜”πŸ˜”. Hope you change them. Karna is my favourite character so don't do him dirty. That's it and few minor upgrades in writing style might make the story more interesting.

Reincarnated As Karna With System In Mahabharata

Suryaputra_Karna01
3.9
198 Chs

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Suryaputra_Karna01
Suryaputra_Karna01Author

Thanks πŸ™ I will try to improve myself.

1yr
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Shadow_Ken_Kaneki_9463
Shadow_Ken_Kaneki_9463Lv1

Not Many people write about ancient India And Story about Karna who was Unlucky His Whole life, So keep it Up

1yr

Belial47
Belial47Lv4

good though in starting it's a copy of another novel then to system is good and if you can update regularly then we are good thanks for you efforts 😊

1yr
omnikinesis
omnikinesisLv6

you're writing a poem, not a novel story the amount of " renewed purpose, unwavering determination, awe and warmth, etc........" I am sure you are using Ai just to write but the level of drama in one's monologue is disgusting 🫣 Well, at least the grammar errors are almost not there, but I am very sure it's the work of the Ai

1yr
God_Monke_king
God_Monke_kingLv4

This is almost a complete copy paste of another novel just with a different system.

1yr
Niloy_Das
Niloy_DasLv4

It's very boring. Also the comedy feels VERY forced and uncomfortable.

1yr
FastSquirrel622
FastSquirrel622Lv13

plagiarism of @ForManaga it's a copy of I become Karna with a Million crit system in Mahabharata. Even though you made some changes in the later part it's still like a copy so please try to change it as the story progresses. Good work

1yr
Ether_3508
Ether_3508Lv4

very good , please upload more chapters I can't wait to read them

1yr
Bla_Bla_2562
Bla_Bla_2562Lv14

I think that Mc should try to aim for the reform of society and create a kingdom as per the rules of the vedas that is based on the duties executed by a person their caste will be decided you can take reference of this type of kingdom building from another set of fictional Indian novel by AMISH the immortals of meluha in which the kingdom of meluha had laws which were based on the old vedas. I always felt that it was a shame that Karna didn't do anything for people who faced similar situation like him and we're exploited and made fun of . And since most of the kingdoms wouldn't want this the entire world will become his enemy and scheme against him. Fitting for our overpowered Mc.

1yr
TyrantTron335
TyrantTron335Lv11

Mc is Karna huh, the Same Karna who is more righteous than Yudisthir, More expert than Arjun in warfare, Stronger than Bhima, More knowledgeable than Nakul, Handsome and Charming than Sahdev. This man is the whole package of pandav.

1yr
DrStone_Boi_8104
DrStone_Boi_8104Lv1

This is a 90β„… percent copy of the novel "I Become Karna With a Million Times Crit System In Mahabharata". I know it's hard to start from nothing but taking inspiration is good but not outright copying

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