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2023-06-15 21:36

Really interesting start. Love the world-building and the way the author has written characters. Grammar is a little lacking the the beginning, but it does seem to get better as you read on.

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Having delved into the first few chapters of this book, I must say that I am generally impressed with the author's storytelling abilities. However, there are a few areas that could benefit from some attention and refinement.First and foremost, the book does contain a handful of grammatical errors. While these mistakes are not overly abundant, they are noticeable enough to occasionally distract the reader. A thorough proofreading could easily remedy this issue, allowing the audience to become fully immersed in the story without any hiccups.Additionally, I believe the author could improve the overall reading experience by focusing more on the vividness and clarity of scene descriptions. By fleshing out the details and painting a more complete picture, the author can ensure that every reader, regardless of their background or imagination, can easily visualize and understand the events unfolding in the story.Despite these areas for improvement, I must commend the author on the many aspects of this book that are truly captivating. The characters are intriguing, the pacing is well-balanced, and the plot shows great promise. With some fine-tuning, I have no doubt that this book will become a must-read for fans of the genre.In conclusion, this book offers an engaging journey that keeps readers hooked, but it would benefit from some polishing in terms of grammar and scene descriptions. I am optimistic that the author will continue to hone their craft in subsequent chapters and eagerly await the twists and turns that lie ahead.

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