Sigh, this is unreadable. For starters, the MC is a edgy twelve year old Kage level fighter who thinks of himself to be the smartest and openly opposes everyone. Next, everyone else has the mentality and planning skills of a 4 year old child. Not a single person in this fanfic is worthy of being called a 'ninja'I'll tell how ridiculous the situation is - The 3rd Great Ninja War has started. Konoha is said to be attacked by everyone. But instead of giving their all in battle, Konoha Elders are trying to get the MC killed and sacrificing hundreds of Uchiha while MC's father kills Root ninjas. What a war plan. Just wow. Oh, and all the village elders are shown to be the epitome of evil. Senju clan? Killed by the elders. Uchiha clan? they have the same plans for them.The characterization doesn't match their canon personalities. The dialogues of the Village Elders also sound to be like of little children rather than of experience war-hardened ninjas. Oh, and a major part of the battles looks to be written by Chatgpt. And for some reason, the author switched from normal way of writing to showing 5 PoV in a single battle. Anyways, story is not worth reading unless you are looking to read something that would amuse you by how bad it is. PS : If Author reads this review, I hope he takes it as a challenge to not repeat idiosyncrasies as the above in his next book and actually put some work into making the characters realistic.
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I will tell you few facts that's childish1. Danzo allied with Rain village just so that Konoha and Iwagakure can fight for more time and he can become Hokage and it is canon.2. Third Hokage let Danzo live when Danzo was almost certain that for attempting assassination on Hokage he will be executed, now this is childish.3. Uchiha clan was hated by all four of the elders due to Tobirama and theirs relationship in Sengoku era. this is also canon.4. After Uchiha clan was executed Hiruzen punished Danzo by saying "your roots are disbanded." Didn't Hiruzen knew about curse mark of roots he knew about it what does this show childish. 4 year old thinking.5. the most important part this my fanfic whatever I write is up to me.
1. Danzo didn't attack Konoha's own forces during the battle. And the alliance he created was during the ending stages of the war where Konoha wasn't in grave danger. While you are pretty much having a civil war in the shadows in the early stages of a war where you stated that Konoha is surrounded by enemies on all sides. 2. Yup. Agreed that was very stupid (won't called it childish but definitely very stupid). 3. Nope. There is no canon information that the elders hated Uchiha since the start. Don't forget that Tobirama also had an Uchiha student. The alertness of the Elders against Uchiha only appeared after Kyubi attack and death of 4th Hokage (which wasn't unfound as Obito was behind it). Even Danzo himself wasn't ever shown in canon to 'hate' Uchihas. He just considered them as too dangerous and a ticking time bomb for the village. 4. Hiruzen can't completely disband the Root (unless he intended to kill Danzo). What he did was ensured that Danzo couldn't operate in daylight and couldn't recruit any more children into Root. I'd recommend you reading 'Naruto - The Wind Calamity' fanfic. It does a great job at depicting how this exchange could have gone. 5. See, just because some aspects in the original series don't make sense or are childish, it doesn't mean that you should create something that is equally or even more childish. Most people don't enjoy reading this. Anyways, yeah, this is your book. You can write it however you want. I wish you success and good luck. Once again, don't read my review as something bad and see if you feel any of my points feel valid. If they do, I hope you work towards correcting them. If not, then just ignore me and enjoy writing your work.
Hkj:I will tell you few facts that's childish1. Danzo allied with Rain village just so that Konoha and Iwagakure can fight for more time and he can become Hokage and it is canon.2. Third Hokage let Danzo live when Danzo was almost certain that for attempting assassination on Hokage he will be executed, now this is childish.3. Uchiha clan was hated by all four of the elders due to Tobirama and theirs relationship in Sengoku era. this is also canon.4. After Uchiha clan was executed Hiruzen punished Danzo by saying "your roots are disbanded." Didn't Hiruzen knew about curse mark of roots he knew about it what does this show childish. 4 year old thinking.5. the most important part this my fanfic whatever I write is up to me.
Thanks for your opinion. You're right about your point, but the actions of Danzo shown throughout Naruto clearly state that he is someone who can go to any lengths. You're saying that a civil war is quite unrealistic, but don't forget two points: 1. Danzo allowed the entire Konoha to be destroyed because he knew that Tsunade was there and could heal almost anyone. Additionally, during the second and third ninja wars, Hiruzen was said to be at his peak, so Danzo's confidence comes from there.2. Uchiha Karan killed Hiruzen's son, so his extreme actions may be justified.
DemiGod_2972:1. Danzo didn't attack Konoha's own forces during the battle. And the alliance he created was during the ending stages of the war where Konoha wasn't in grave danger. While you are pretty much having a civil war in the shadows in the early stages of a war where you stated that Konoha is surrounded by enemies on all sides. 2. Yup. Agreed that was very stupid (won't called it childish but definitely very stupid). 3. Nope. There is no canon information that the elders hated Uchiha since the start. Don't forget that Tobirama also had an Uchiha student. The alertness of the Elders against Uchiha only appeared after Kyubi attack and death of 4th Hokage (which wasn't unfound as Obito was behind it). Even Danzo himself wasn't ever shown in canon to 'hate' Uchihas. He just considered them as too dangerous and a ticking time bomb for the village. 4. Hiruzen can't completely disband the Root (unless he intended to kill Danzo). What he did was ensured that Danzo couldn't operate in daylight and couldn't recruit any more children into Root. I'd recommend you reading 'Naruto - The Wind Calamity' fanfic. It does a great job at depicting how this exchange could have gone. 5. See, just because some aspects in the original series don't make sense or are childish, it doesn't mean that you should create something that is equally or even more childish. Most people don't enjoy reading this. Anyways, yeah, this is your book. You can write it however you want. I wish you success and good luck. Once again, don't read my review as something bad and see if you feel any of my points feel valid. If they do, I hope you work towards correcting them. If not, then just ignore me and enjoy writing your work.
My friend, in some points you are right in others you are not, the Uchiha had already been excluded in a certain way even before Kurama's attack, they were expelled to the outskirts of the city instead of staying in the center together with other great clans, the situation of the massacre shows that even before that there was already a clear intention of their being purged the fact that not even the babies were left alive shows that it was more a personal thing than really a need, apart from that the whole situation could have been resolved by making Itachi the Hokage, he was loyal to the village and powerful but prejudice was so great that this option was never offered even though Hiruzen needed a replacement.
DemiGod_2972:1. Danzo didn't attack Konoha's own forces during the battle. And the alliance he created was during the ending stages of the war where Konoha wasn't in grave danger. While you are pretty much having a civil war in the shadows in the early stages of a war where you stated that Konoha is surrounded by enemies on all sides. 2. Yup. Agreed that was very stupid (won't called it childish but definitely very stupid). 3. Nope. There is no canon information that the elders hated Uchiha since the start. Don't forget that Tobirama also had an Uchiha student. The alertness of the Elders against Uchiha only appeared after Kyubi attack and death of 4th Hokage (which wasn't unfound as Obito was behind it). Even Danzo himself wasn't ever shown in canon to 'hate' Uchihas. He just considered them as too dangerous and a ticking time bomb for the village. 4. Hiruzen can't completely disband the Root (unless he intended to kill Danzo). What he did was ensured that Danzo couldn't operate in daylight and couldn't recruit any more children into Root. I'd recommend you reading 'Naruto - The Wind Calamity' fanfic. It does a great job at depicting how this exchange could have gone. 5. See, just because some aspects in the original series don't make sense or are childish, it doesn't mean that you should create something that is equally or even more childish. Most people don't enjoy reading this. Anyways, yeah, this is your book. You can write it however you want. I wish you success and good luck. Once again, don't read my review as something bad and see if you feel any of my points feel valid. If they do, I hope you work towards correcting them. If not, then just ignore me and enjoy writing your work.
Thanks man.. You saved me from wasting time.
Uchiha clan was moved to the outskirts after Minato's death. Same for monitoring them non stop. These were the two main reasons for the coup. While some conflict might have existed, it'll just a normal conflict of interest and not something as ridiculous as shown in here. They are having their own civil war while supposedly being surrounded on all sides by enemy nations. As for Itachi, he was merely 13 years old. Too young for Hokage. Agreed that some future promises could have been made. But if they were unwilling to even remove the monitoring, it is doubtful that the Elders would do that or if Uchiha clan would trust them. (Yeah, the canon Uchiha Massacre has a lot of things I don't agree with either, like killing the babies, it's not a reason to make it even more unreasonable in a fanfic).
Alef_Biersack:My friend, in some points you are right in others you are not, the Uchiha had already been excluded in a certain way even before Kurama's attack, they were expelled to the outskirts of the city instead of staying in the center together with other great clans, the situation of the massacre shows that even before that there was already a clear intention of their being purged the fact that not even the babies were left alive shows that it was more a personal thing than really a need, apart from that the whole situation could have been resolved by making Itachi the Hokage, he was loyal to the village and powerful but prejudice was so great that this option was never offered even though Hiruzen needed a replacement.
I understand your point but the truth is that Danzo would be more than willing to do something like that, he let Konoha be attacked twice, it's worth remembering that after Minato's death Konoha was already very weak compared to the other three large villages around The death of the Uchiha clan placed them as the fourth weakest village at the beginning of the canon, so yes in pursuit of personal interests they are more than willing to put the village in danger, Hiruzen could have taken Itachi and Shisui as students and made one of them the next kage.
DemiGod_2972:Uchiha clan was moved to the outskirts after Minato's death. Same for monitoring them non stop. These were the two main reasons for the coup. While some conflict might have existed, it'll just a normal conflict of interest and not something as ridiculous as shown in here. They are having their own civil war while supposedly being surrounded on all sides by enemy nations. As for Itachi, he was merely 13 years old. Too young for Hokage. Agreed that some future promises could have been made. But if they were unwilling to even remove the monitoring, it is doubtful that the Elders would do that or if Uchiha clan would trust them. (Yeah, the canon Uchiha Massacre has a lot of things I don't agree with either, like killing the babies, it's not a reason to make it even more unreasonable in a fanfic).
