Writing Quality: Reading dialogues is like bathing in sand or watching two planks of wood talking to each other, it feels very awkward and robotic. Not to mention putting useless "filler" chapter that dont really give anything to the story from my point of view. Stability of Updates: It's good Story Development: The chapters are very short so after 20 chapters of reading nothing happened, there are plot holes from the very start of the story. "I have business in city" Proceed to forget about that, sure. Braindead sl#very moment with even more common heroine who gets beaten up. Character Design: It's probably the worst of them all, Cinde or whatever her name was is a completely braindead character with this personality that i hate, using 0 amount of brain while acting. Momonga isn't really momonga but hey its au so i dont really put it in rating here. The first Villain (The rapppppper if you catch what i mean) is another braindead character who noticed the guy who is about to kill him only when hes behind him not hearing his 4 bodyguards getting absolutely destroyed next to him. I literally stopped reading after it becase the talk between 2 or 3 guards of this sleppy joe syndicate made my skin crawl, literally eating butter with butter. World Background: seems interesting giving it 4*.
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I took awhile to respond, but I agree with most of this when re-reading my own story. Definitely a fair amount of plot holes, and I could’ve handled it better; hopefully I’ll improve as I write more :) Thanks for your criticism, and I hope I see more criticism from people like you cause it is helpful.
