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Naayil
NaayilLv41yr
2023-04-11 17:38

Currently I believe the story to be quite good, although there is a severe lack of why the character wanted to do all the things that happened in volume one. I believe in the second volume there should be a flash back arc (should be > 50% of the chapter and it should contain character motivations) A possible third arc could include pucci and attempting to reach heaven? Or Jolyne actually trying to get revenge on the mc or even the events of Golden Wind

Tempo Symphony

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Shameless author review, as my third webnovel, hopefully I can make this one even better than my previous ones.

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Me gusta la historia pero siento que se está separando de la prota, con el tiempo que tarda en actualizar y que casi no salga la prota siento que pues ya no parece la prota y es un libro de múltiples perspectivas sin algún protagonista.

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