Review Detail of vorlefan in CAITH

It has potential to be a good novel. Only that it has some issues that can potentially remove it from the spotlight. Writing quality: It has some mismatch between tenses, and long paragraphs turn it harden to read. Try to split the long ones in fractions. Character: It lacks metaphors, analogies and the work about what they are feeling, their wishes, their struggles. It lacks a connection with the reader. All in all, keep up the good work :)