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2023-07-25 21:13

The plot is well written and the world building is well done. I like the heroine and the son. Their interactions are very cute. There could be improvements in the grammar, tense, and spelling. It's nothing too major, but the author uses sweets instead of sweats, stairs instead of stares, along with other little mistakes. There are sentences like, "she wanted to reach out, unfortunately my hands were tied behind her back." So, nothing that detracts from the story as far as I've read, but it is something to note. As I go further in reading I'll update my review.

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