Review Detail of Asriel_IsDreemurr in Pokemon: Journey of a lifetime

It's probably because the prologue isn't done yet I plan on adding more and more until I will reveal the reason why he knows all those stuff

I also didn't plan on posting the Prologue yet until it's done...But it's so troublesome to copy it and make it into pdf Everytime I changed or added something ...so I just posted it because I need to show it so I can get some advice on how to improve my writing more .