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AMonarch
AMonarchAuthor1yr
2023-03-03 12:24

This is a reupload because I had stopped writing and I've been trying to get back into it. First 100 chapters are edited and you can expect them to be published at a rate of 2 a day. _________ Author’s shameless review. To be upfront with my work, I would rate the first 84 chapters 3.5-4/5. This is with being a bit harsh as with every new work I make, I try to significantly improve my writing as seen with the difference between my first and second novel which the second one was given a lot more praise than the first one in the comments. An improvement that made in this novel was that I removed the dragged on mysteries which were a complaint in my second novel. Even so I would have to say this work is at max a 4/5 which it gets mainly because of the world building in the story (until chapter 84). If you actually take time to appreciate the vast world in this novel, you would understand why even with the flaw of having bland side characters, I would give this novel a 4/5 simply because of how much there is to learn about the world in this novel. The current world in of itself is already written well in itself however the history of it which will be revealed in the later chapters will be a nice added touch. As for the point on bland side characters, I did not realize how bad this was until it was brought to my attention. Although I had received a comment about it previously, I thought it was some sort of mistake until a I saw a detailed review that I received on it which made me realize a new aspect of writing that I needed to work on. I had received this comment on my second novel when this novel was written to chapter 84 and I believe I have improved quite a lot since then. This is the reason why I believe that you, the reader should invest into this novel since although the side characters will be bland in the first 84 chapters with a couple of them gaining some character development since they will important to the later part of the story, after chapter 84, this novel starts to take off in the right direction. I don’t want to get your hopes up too much but I believe that the story is worth a rating of 10/5 after the improvements made to the characters. Just kidding… totally. Keep in mind that I am not saying that if you don’t enjoy the novel in itself that you will somehow fall in love with it after chapter 84 since I don’t want to waste your time. All I am saying is that if you like the world and the concepts built into it but feel that the characters could use some work, I suggest you wait until chapter 84 onward before you begin to think about dropping it. Of course feel free to stop reading the novel if you feel that it just is not for you at any moment. Upload schedule: 2 chapters a day with 1000 words each as long as it is received well since it gives me motivation to write more and better. Harem?: No. I have tried to write harem into my previous works but they simply do not work with the types of main characters that I create. There will be females that will fall in love with the main character but most will not stay with him forever. Editing chapters: I have reviewed and looked for errors in the first 40 chapters, if they novel does well, I will edit all of them and improve them as much as possible. I hope that answered all you questions but if you still have some questions, feel free to ask and I will answer to the best of my abilities.

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