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Marcus_Salieri
Marcus_SalieriLv11yr
2023-03-15 02:47

It's interesting to say the least and I think it has potential but I do think you need to clear up some writting mistakes, also the cursing is at times a bit much but besides that the world seems interesting, there are some new takes on the whole magic ganre and the charachters seem to have more depth than your usual light novel.

The path to eternity

Schriftsteller123
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I'm glad you liked it and yeah I know about the writing needing a revision, but I'm currently just world / character building. All the writing mishaps will clear up before the novel reaches 10 ch. Again thank you for reading my work and taking the time to post a comment. :)

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Solomon_Rivers
Solomon_RiversLv1

This is a very good story, there is some things you can work on but since you mentioned that you will be fixing them in the future I won't get into that. What I really like about your story is that it isn't just mindless scrible, characters are logicaly writen, the world building is fantastic, there is some nice humour added into the mix. So all in all I think this will be a very interesting read in the future.

1yr

Sucratron_NM
Sucratron_NMLv1

Charachters are interesting, especially the main character. I don't know if he was supposed to be a villain or a antihero, but i can't wait to found out. I also think the side charachters are quite well developed. The world building is another thing I think is great about the novel. So yeah all in all i think this one will be a good read.

1yr
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