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giantking0809
giantking0809Lv131yr
2023-07-14 20:21

Was decent for a villian protagonist until I started noticing things like a reluctance to kill peopl in general if they are good/innocent. also the story starts deviating from argon and becomes about the world inhabitants and how everybody is supposed to be United and loving and how evil will never prosper. First off the way author writes cultvators is off cultivators pursue benifits over anything else including over morals (for good cultivators the benefit must be astronomical to forgoe their morals). I don’t necessarily have an issue with any of the actions taking place I just have an issue for the reasoning on why. they are doing stupid for stupid reasons all because it’s what they ’re supposed to do. pls take the DARK tag out as nothing the protag has done is dark begrudgingly I’ll let you have the villain tag, but I will say that the dark moon clan is better candidate to be this supposed villain story’s protag

I Created A Dungeon In A Cultivation World

BLACKangelmarl
4.0
495 Chs

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BLACKangelmarl
BLACKangelmarlAuthor

Hello, shameless author here, I'm not a Chinese so this will be a little different from you typical Xianxia novels. That's all, also give me a review if you happen to like it.

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WebReaderPub
WebReaderPubLv14

The premise was great, but then author decided to make the MC a villain who commit nedless cruel actions and make bad choices for the sake of looking evil. For example he choose an evil cultivator he had just seen as his subordinate to manage a city, when he could have saved the city lord, who looked like a trustworthy person and had more experience with managing people. Another thing I disliked is the total massacre. Read some others dungeon novels, it makes no sense for the death rate to be that high. Who would want to enter a dungeon where armies get decimated? Humans are greedy, but not that stupid. And sometimes the same rules you made for the tower don't works for the sake of plot. For example when the experience didn't get absorbed immediately by the city lord or when the evil cultivator absorbed the experience from the monsters someone else killed; among these monster there was also one with one layer lower, but you previously said that one could absorb experience only from monster with the same or higher cultivation. There are many other little things i disliked and i truly think it is a pity that this story took such a turn.

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MobinHood
MobinHoodLv15

Great idea bad execution. MC is a one dimensional edge lord. So far there is no discernable motivation for the MC. The MC is needlessly vicious when there is no need for it. As I already said, the idea is great. If it was a better fleshed out story it could have been great, despite the lackluster writing quality.

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Fallen_Asura
Fallen_AsuraLv3

Well...what can I say? A new unique Concept which is hard to come by....a hidden gem!! Grammar is good...update stability is good too...7 chapters a week...9/10 from Me...😋

2yr
SovereignOfDarc
SovereignOfDarcLv14

I must say the story line is great. I love the idea of a dungeon-style cultivation novel. I don't think I have read anything like it before. The only downside I have seen so far is the grammar, a bit. I see you use present tense and not past tense a lot. That affects reading as I feel that the way the MC is talking isn't right. Maybe use past tense in the future. Other than that, I like it. Keep up the good work.

2yr
Apocalypse_2ndLife
Apocalypse_2ndLifeLv3

Everything was going good but the quality keeps decreasing now that it feels like chapters are MTL or maybe just summary like in around ~50+ chapters, English is alright, not much character or World development and also dungeon development is rushed or skipped now...... [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]

2yr
Max_Zeon
Max_ZeonLv1

Up to date with the released chapters. The story is good but there have been more flaws as we keep on moving forward. 1) Poor grammar, but readable. 2) Too much information overload in some parts, but makes sense. 3) Too much cringe lines. 4) MC thinking the subordinates can betray him and doesn't want to trust the system too much, when it is literally the system giving him everything. 5) MC gets soul coins from killing other beings, but in recent chaps(specially in the forbidden areas part), he gets no soul coins from killing so many powerful cultivators. 6) MC taking risks for no reason, like he accompanied Isadora to unknown regions when he was just at Golden Core, then goes on to fight Core Formation Tree God when there was risk of failure. Why the heck would the author make MC go out when he doesn't have information on those parts. He could just wait and upgrade his strength and slowly scout out the regions through his subordinates. It is readable, but there are many things that could be improved.

1yr
Olajide_O_Favour
Olajide_O_FavourLv3

This book got an adventurous plot, men, this book got me so good.🤟🏾🤟🏾🤟🏾🤟🏾, So you should vote, recommend it to y'all people.💞💞💞💞

2yr
heminasti
heminastiLv15

It's alright.The main issue for me is the change in writing style. In later chapters it's written in such a melodramatic way. For example a character will be fighting to save a city and it will say, "She must retain her boundless resolve to sacrifice herself for justice. The fate of the world depended on her and she must not falter." Then it will keep going like that for 2 or 3 paragraphs before doing any fighting. It also began to focus mostly on everyone except the main character. It's not unreasonable given the setup of the MC staying behind the scenes in his dungeon, but I liked how Top Tier Providence balanced that better.Except... the other characters are actually more interesting than the MC and his subordinates. Because the MC and his crew become cardboard cutouts who pretty much only say cringe and cliche villain lines.

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