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Boqpsn
BoqpsnLv1411mth
2024-04-26 12:48

Can i ask you something author, I can understand that you like to give your MC a lot of plot armor, and i mean a lot or maybe all the time…., and i am okay with that, but cant you keep some hidden move or secret power in the MC which only the MC knows and not anyone else. I mean , in all the part of the story , everything is known about the MC to everyone , every move he makes , every power he has , etc. its like , he is not an MC but some character dancing like a puppet in someones hand all the time in the novel. He doesn’t even use his knowledge of fairy tale in the story for his advantage. It’s really frustrating . I like you writing quality a lot , but create a plot for the story is not your strong suit. Also his emotions, they change on drop . He feels like mentally challenged and not the type with terrible past, but actually genuinely emotionally challenged person!! I love your other work on the marvel and other story.. keep up the good work … I read your story because of your impeccable writing quality.. don’t loose that!! Thanks and best of luck!!

Fairy Tail: Shinigami

CORNBRINGER
4.7
310 Chs

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CORNBRINGER
CORNBRINGERAuthor

I hope you guys like it. With Love, Corn 🌽.

2yr

Berserker_Dragon
Berserker_DragonLv4

If It's Corn🌽 it's good. No More Words Needed.

2yr
GodOfHeroes
GodOfHeroesLv4

It's Cornbringer, what did you expect? .

2yr
MorningWood_Dao
MorningWood_DaoLv5

I only comment here because it's the newest novel you made. just a bit of advice as a long time reader. assuming you want to improve this is for all your novel. even though I only read 3 of your novels(gamer, blackbolt, and shinigami) I like your novel man. you're a good writer, at least above average, but for some/most narration paragraph, especially actions are kinda cringe. it feels 1 dimensional and egoistic and narrow. you're not amateur writer anymore, stop writing using 1st person pov ( I, me, my) for almost everything. learn to try using 3rd person pov on narration. it's a small change, but the impact is big in term of writing quality.

1yr
QBL
QBLLv4

No Harem ! Yes, he is a Corn of class. ...............................................................................................

2yr
Aleksic
AleksicLv13

Reveal spoiler

1yr
Tales_de_Mileto
Tales_de_MiletoLv1

The development of the story is kinda meh, too much AU. Doesn't feel Fairytail, might as well make this an OG...

1yr
Tim_QQQ
Tim_QQQLv1

the author doesn't know how to make things exciting. that's one of the only two things I dislike about the novel but it is quite bad imo. the fight scenes are lacklustre at best and arnt built up properly. and I also really dislike the fact that the soul society (bleach world) exists as a separate dimension/ reality and that mc goes there for like 40% of the novel. its disappointing if anything tbh. i read 140 chapters or whatever (its hard to say because there's like 40 announcment chapters littered throughout which was annoying) to get there and i just really didnt wanna read about bleach for 100 chapters tbh so i dropped there after reading the chapter names and finding out the rest of the novel is there.

1yr
CouchPotatoDandy
CouchPotatoDandyLv5

No character growth whatsoever, suddenly after a few chapters the MC starts to risk his life to fight unbeatable opponents for the current time or tries to save innocent people like he became a hero or something (again, for no apparent reason... He just felt like it...) He risks his life and sometimes literally going to missions with certain death to save someone he barely knew for a day, and I'm sorry to tell you but that is not how emotions and human nature work, and that makes it all the more hard to swallow while reading this... Honestly I love the author and all his other works, which is all the more disappointing for me to see that he might just have no more creativity to make good arcs and plot lines. Anyway, I won't recommend this fanfic.

1yr
UmUUwU
UmUUwULv3

author you can delete this comment, but one thing is certain this is one of the stories that made me most disgusted to read, one piece of advice is to create this rubbish MC and story, don't waste your time doing this, you will only receive negativity from several people.

1yr
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