Review Detail of AkiraLight in I'm The Tower Ruler
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I want to rate this better but yhe writing is garbage, it's like reading a toddler describe his day out to his mom, it's not coherent or flow correctly. MTL would write better then this. Improve more and I might come back to give this another try.
I'm The Tower Ruler
TenmaName
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Thanks for the advice, I was recommended to use them too by a friend and I trying using more bot chatting to get used typing in English. I'll keeping writing the story likewise with those helps ;D
AkiraLight:The first person description isn't necessarily a problem, as long as you clearly show whose point of view it is at the start it's fine. The problem stems with the grammer and flow of the story. At times we're a more descriptive background is needed the story lacks, the characters emotions don't feel genuine or real. There's no way for readers to fully immerse themselves in the novel. My suggestion for you is to use platforms such as Grammerly to help fix up the writing's grammer. You could also try ChatGPT to give you examples to what descriptive words to describe a scene your imagining. As long as you can tackle the grammer and flow first the rest can be fixed through time.
TenmaName:Thanks for the reviews, as you can see my english is very poor. I want to know, anything about the story itself? And if you have good tip for writing?
The first person description isn't necessarily a problem, as long as you clearly show whose point of view it is at the start it's fine. The problem stems with the grammer and flow of the story. At times we're a more descriptive background is needed the story lacks, the characters emotions don't feel genuine or real. There's no way for readers to fully immerse themselves in the novel. My suggestion for you is to use platforms such as Grammerly to help fix up the writing's grammer. You could also try ChatGPT to give you examples to what descriptive words to describe a scene your imagining. As long as you can tackle the grammer and flow first the rest can be fixed through time.
TenmaName:It's First-person description a problem as well?
