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Danny_DannyRK
Danny_DannyRKLv11yr
2023-03-21 23:34

I like the way your new work is trying to go in a whole new direction and all, after it is tiring to always read about some unlucky guy trying to get revenge for being rejected by a girl. "Boy! Ain't got no manners..." How many people get rejected daily and it does not be come the highlight of their life. Keep that up, but if the story starts developing such symptoms, I'm bailing

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ArrogantYungMaster
ArrogantYungMasterLv4

As of Ch. 225 I’ll be honest I’m a little torn on my thoughts on this novel. I shall explain why. First of all the overall concept of the novel is great, author does well to make sure there are no plot holes in terms of the MC’s decision making or how he advances in strength. The pace of the novel is also good, it’s fast enough that you can enjoy the progress and also understand what’s going on. The word count for every chapter is also really long, and finally the storyline itself is GOOD. I’ll be real though, there’s a massive info dump in this novel. It’s not very noticeable early on but as you hit the later chapters, it goes into extreme depth with the MCs thought process, reasonings behind his actions and then over explains everything that’s happening. I, for one, don’t mind info dumps if they’re done correctly. But that amount I’ve read, and where the story is currently at don’t add up. It becomes a pain to read at some point because you can see the MC being fleshed out and improving with every chapter but in the grand scheme of things the MC is literally going from a power level of 10 to 11 and the people he’s catching up to are sitting on 100. (This is an example, not a spoiler). The crazy part though is that because every chapter is condensed (and long which I like), you can’t help but think that the story is progressing well when in reality there’s not a lot happening (much like DBZ fight). Sigh aside from the insane info dump, the only other thing I can point my finger at is that things that happen in the novel seem erratic and displaced. For instance, the MC will be breaking through a stage, and then the POV will randomly switch to his senior sister going through her own troubles, and then it’ll switch to some random disciple from a different faction talking with his faction friend etc. This just led to me skipping over some sections because I was just more interested in what was happening with the MC and I think that takes away from what the author was trying to do. Ultimately, the problems I’ve mentioned aren’t super big and can be improved upon and I think it’ll make the nocel much easier to read. If you’re considering reading this novel just go ahead and have a read. It does start a little differently that most other novels like this start but the storyline starts to get interesting after the first few chapters (I think 10?). My brain hurts.

LostEra
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first impressions after reading the first 50 chapters. So far an interesting story about a man who 'accidentally' found a cultivation technique that allows him to live for a very long time. After a long time of cultivation and pushing earth technology to an higher from the shadows he is discovered by some powerful creatures who guide him to leave earth and go to a dimension where humans cultivate. He is 'guided' to join a sect and start his cultivation journey. I like that the story is told in a different way than the cultivation stories from Chinese writers (different pacing, different starting point and route towards the furst cultivation steps, etc) while still being a cultivation story. It gives the story a fresh feeling (starting as sci-fi and changing into cultivation in a way not seen very often). What I also like is that although the mc is starting out with the mc receiving all kinds of 'plot armor' and lucky encounters it is told in such a way that it is not just luck that will make the mc strong, he earns it with smart choices. And on this platform one of the best things I could say is that so far I haven't seen an 'idiotic young master' type of character (I hate those characters bc they often get themselves and their family killed for the dumbest of reasons. They are called cannon fodder for a reason but more often than not it doesn't do the image of the mc in the eyes of the reader much good. An antagonist who acts out of logical reasoning make the main character look better when he defeats them) Not everything is great but so far I have only found minor things and not things like where the story and character development breaks world building. Think of things like sound in space, small mistakes that are also often made in movies and animation. And another thing that sometimes can be better is the distinction between narrator and character. When is the narrator talking about the mc, when is the narrator talking in general. In other words small things that could often be fixed with a slight restructuring of some sentences or paragraphs. The story is interesting, plays out in an interesting world and told in an entertaining way. I hope it can hold this energy in later chapters too.

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