The world is pretty interesting, sentences sometimes don't flow perfectly but it's nothing brain-melting like MTL. Honestly really good potential to be a good story if the author keeps up with writing it. Most of the problems in the book could probably be solved within 50ish chapters of writing and getting more comfortable with the style. Keep it up author!
Shelled
Liked it!
LIKENothing major, just the occasional strange turn of phrase. Like I said, it's something that I'm sure will disappear after about 50 chapters as you get more familiar with your own style etc.
Shelled:Thank you for the feedback. This is the first book I’ve written, and I’m having a blast with it. You say my sentences don’t flow perfectly. Could you expand on that? I only ask out of a desire to improve my writing.
Shelled:Thank you for the feedback. This is the first book I’ve written, and I’m having a blast with it. You say my sentences don’t flow perfectly. Could you expand on that? I only ask out of a desire to improve my writing.