In terms of writing, you are slightly above average, but in terms of developing the story, you are good and continue with steadfastness and a little good character design. He looks more like an ordinary trainee than a hero of the story, but I think you will change him after he gets out of the abyss. In general, this is my current assessment. I wish you success and continue on. Create chapters. [img=coins]
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