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2024-04-28 06:57

i gave it a fair shake but.. With the long winded convoluted and esoteric description of everything from gotham to mount justice to how hes feeling to what hes seeing. This fic is 91% description 9% plot and character growth. then when we finally get into the plot and he joins young justice. it starts getting good. then it get bad again when u start having them call him "family" or "brother" out of no were. its a conclusion to the greavance of the team that come off unearned on both sides. He didnt earn forgivness and the team didnt either.

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maybe if you would read more before judging you might get an understanding of why that was done, and you don't want description, SO THAT WAS LITERALLY IT, don't ask me to describe and then tell me it was descriptive enough on why they call him brother and family out of nowhere this is what you asked for, and you received go cry somewhere else.

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Master_Atlest:maybe if you would read more before judging you might get an understanding of why that was done, and you don't want description, SO THAT WAS LITERALLY IT, don't ask me to describe and then tell me it was descriptive enough on why they call him brother and family out of nowhere this is what you asked for, and you received go cry somewhere else.
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