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Linus279
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2023-04-09 00:45

The fanfiction has an interesting and promising idea, but the reading experience is hindered by the convoluted writing style. There are many unnecessary and lengthy sentences that can confuse readers and divert attention away from the actual content. The author should strive to express their thoughts more clearly and concisely in order to provide a pleasant reading experience. Nonetheless, the story is appealing and has the potential to become a real pleasure to read with some revision

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