Fix your grammar, MTL man. Whenever you need to use words like stopped, or continued, you’d instead say stop or continue. Finish the word for Christ’s sake.

To be honest it’s got good potential and establishes its premise very early on making it an easy read. The one thing I will say needs improvement though is the quality, whilst it’s not totally unreadable you definitely do slip up grammatically a fair bit. I recommend just looking over each chapter when you’re done writing it once you do that this story will jump leaps and bounds.

Okay so, if you can ignore minor misspelled words this story is for you. Update Frequency: So far the author has given us a new chapter everyday. If not everday maybe ever two days, but he/she updates it very frequently. Story: I personally enjoy Nakada’s character he fits perfectly into the blue lock world. The pacing in this story is pretty good. No arcs are dragged on for too long. You will not be disappointed by the story. Personal Opinion: Like I said in the beginning if you can ignore minor grammar issues than this story has potential to be one of the best blue lock fanfics you will ever read. Give it a try. 👍🏽

Wow great job, this is surprisingly ur 4th novel and I have to say I didn't enjoy and I tell u, I'm a diehard Blue lock fan. why? Firstly the English is terrible I know it might not be your first language but at least try to reread or u could use Grammarly to write. Secondly the MC is way too op, overly so. How will u tell me, someone played in q football field for an 1hr without breaking a sweat, I get that this is anime but man, that's too much, it makes no sense. Then MC is just making everyone stronger what is he? God? Tf is the use of that? This is blue lock u crush others and make urself better when did u ever see a guy, training others it's more like they're training together for their good and don't tell me is bcs MC can't play with weaklings bcs from the way u made him I don't think he even needs them. Review ur story bruh, it's got many issues.

You would benefit from making smaller paragraphs, especially in a sports based book where a lot things are happening. Also, I was especting mc to be isekaid into the manga bluelock. Would’ve made an more interesting and fun perspective.

Seems like a decent fic but the grammar is just too bad

Y does mc yap so much.. bro is a certified yapper.. I get that dude is op but training people that will eventually become your opponents is the dumbest thing ever.. plus I’m pretty sure they were already adapting and improving at a great pace in the anime.. y make them stronger?

capítulos cortos , la mayoría de los capítulos son rellenos que no aportan a la trama , la mayor parte esta hecho por IA, la relaciones personales son mediocres parece que el autor no interactúa con otras personas y no sabe cómo interactuar y ese se refleja en el fic

Please does anyone have tips for a blue lock story I'm trying to write one and please tell me what will be interesting to read

man, this is too bland. the way the mc interacted is kinda weird as well. especially in some question sentences