webnovel
indroid
indroidLv41yr
2023-02-05 21:17

So far so good. Author can give Vitra's soul fragment the ability of shadow monarch. It's for his little sisters protection (shadow guard) and convinient (shadow teleport). Saji also can become dragon rider by awaken dragon corpse (scattered soul). It's just my suggestion, author. You can write what you want.

Liked by 2 people

LIKE
empty img

No replies. Be the first!

Other Reviews
KrazyNight
KrazyNightLv11

Ahhh, what to say, what to say? I love it! Author-sama you really are a fantastic writer. I was excited to read this novel. I honestly love how hardworking the MC is, how he can honestly respect people and not treat them as a fictional character. Honestly, I’m only a little disappointed on how much you skipped, in order to get to the main story. Imagine the hardship the MC had to live through growing up and taking care of his little sisters. I want to see that, I want to read about it, no! I have to read about it! Author-sama please write about the MC past, make it a chapter or two. Imagine how much stress the MC had to go through in order to have good grade and amazing sport and combat abilities. Imagine how little sleep the MC had, imagine the responsibility of being an other brother, no their guardian. How he idk only has like 4 hrs of sleep, how he force himself not to cry after loosing his grandfather in front of his little sisters. How he had to wake up early in order to dress them for school and make breakfast, lunch, and dinner. How he might have struggle for money in order to keep her sisters smile. How he tried tutoring them and etc. While reading this chapter, I realized that the MC possesses amazing abilities, but please don’t down play his achievements, sure you can say he’s amazing at mix martial arts but imagine how hard he worked for it. I’m sure our MC walked home one day seriously bruised and injured from training. Maybe he still need to finish his hw that day, maybe he wanted to hide his injuries from his family. Perhaps his sisters already knew his struggle. You should really develop the MC’s relationship with his sisters more, you make it sound like background character. You know I wouldn’t mind if you revised the first chapter to include this. Either way, I love your write.

WintyLP
WintyLPLv1
Related Stories