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GetsuccedLv12yr
2023-01-07 11:51

What to say .... hmm... you're playing the long game i get it but that doesn't make it any better but for the sake of it the story is ok plot is forced but its ok cus with how you started the story killing off his parents i expected this. The only reason i wont say you have a bad mc is because he is 10 years old so you somehow saved that part. The truth I don't wanna watch a kid make mistakes and grow up under the care of other superheroes to become a good hero cus if i wanted to read that i would actually read Spider-Man comics but again thats a personal preference so i havent removed a star for that. Btw the grammer is really bad.

Marvel: fight for tomorrow

DaoistAUtOuh
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I understand your first point but it's not going to be like that, the MC will have very marked their point of view, something I wanted to show with the age was that no matter how young you were, it wouldn't mean they couldn't think for yourself, the MC will have moral dilemmas, but they will be for their own, they won't be infienced by others, but I can't argue with your second point, yes, the writing is garbage, but I do what I can with what I have.

2yr
Getsucced
GetsuccedLv1

you could try grammarly or something.

DaoistAUtOuh:I understand your first point but it's not going to be like that, the MC will have very marked their point of view, something I wanted to show with the age was that no matter how young you were, it wouldn't mean they couldn't think for yourself, the MC will have moral dilemmas, but they will be for their own, they won't be infienced by others, but I can't argue with your second point, yes, the writing is garbage, but I do what I can with what I have.
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Superthinkred
SuperthinkredLv14

can tou atleast change the misspell in the title it is fight not figth

DaoistAUtOuh:I understand your first point but it's not going to be like that, the MC will have very marked their point of view, something I wanted to show with the age was that no matter how young you were, it wouldn't mean they couldn't think for yourself, the MC will have moral dilemmas, but they will be for their own, they won't be infienced by others, but I can't argue with your second point, yes, the writing is garbage, but I do what I can with what I have.
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Superthinkred
SuperthinkredLv14

you*

Superthinkred:can tou atleast change the misspell in the title it is fight not figth
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