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Hasibul_Hasan
Hasibul_HasanLv31yr
2023-01-02 06:56

I hope you keep up doing a great job. I hope to see more of your work in the future. Hope to see you improve as well in writing characters interactions. There are also a few times where you write she instead of he and at the first chapter and a few times in other chapters you wrote her instead of him.

Harry Potter: Heir to Ancient Magic

Guryon
4.4
43 Chs

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Guryon
GuryonAuthor

Thanks for the feedback about replacing him with her, unfortunately it happens when it is translated into English. I write the chapters in Portuguese (pt-BR) and translate them to English afterwards. in this process a 'she' appears when in fact it was a masculine pronoun. Thanks again

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enforcingkn1240
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Honestly a great read, with good world building. So far (chp 15) the main character doesn't just seem to follow the main cast around the whole time.

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Arion_Sturmklinge
Arion_SturmklingeLv2

Great story, I think if you are keep on going this story can get very far _____________________________________________________________________________________

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CruelReality
CruelRealityLv4

Excellent, and I am truly looking forward to reading more. We have an intelligent and interesting MC. Enough minor changes to canon for it to be interesting. Well written conversation and characters, along with a cool new subplot that was recently introduced involving a certain legendary historic wizards legacy. However, what truly makes this fic special is the authors ability to simulataneously expand upon the lore and kinds of magic yet to prevent if from feeling excessive or like an info dump. Worth following.

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SnowApathie
SnowApathieLv4

A really interesting story that does not always follow the main characters and has his own life. The story is well written just some pronouns mistakes here and there. The author is trying to develop the magic part and it doesn't feel like an essay so this is good. Every 'important' character say something so it's not like they are just there without being there. The Dialogs are great, it is smoothing that i think is hard to do but the author can make it seem somewhat natural and develops the side characters. There is one reason why I gave it a 4stars and not 5 stars is that the mc is saying really cringes things to eleven years old and how he describe the female characters (still 11 years old).

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Reborn_noob
Reborn_noobLv4

The story is well written but the main character is kind of obsessed with Harry Potter, his twin and Hermione. He is kind of cringe especially when he said he is attracted by Isabella Potter's eyes(OC Harry twin). His obsession makes it hard for me to continue reading but if we put it aside the novel is well written.

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Rajat_Sharma_0663
Rajat_Sharma_0663Lv1

Ok..the story till now (chapter 18) was good. Bit on the sad theme but not bad... Some points were similar to another hp novel...like one in which Harry's parents were alive and his grandparents died instead....Or he had sister named Rose or something, but in that novel Harry was way too arrogant....well it's just the beginning of 1st year... let's see where story will take us..

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Jordan_AGS
Jordan_AGSLv13

do you post somewhere else ....,..........

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Ciroc
CirocLv4

it’s a good story and the grammar is decent

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ArcanePlayer
ArcanePlayerLv1

The writing could be better, but you are doing great .......................................................................................

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