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Ripun_AggarwalLv137mth
2024-05-25 20:26

The story line and the start of the book was good, but later on everything is a jumbled mess, mc is so dumb that every 50 chapters he says that he will improve but no improvement is seen, and had to face the same situation where harem members suffer, then he promises again but faces the same situation over and over again, it has been 350 chapters but we have only met a single succubus who is not awake, there is no plot for mages and there power, mc absorbs power but don't know how to use them without the system, mc only focuses on a single group, and wanted to make them stronger, but have not used the mage power and only guns. around 100 chapters ago he said that the both worlds power should co exist for it to make them stronger, but again noone tried and still the mc group is ignorant of how to use mana and magic . Mc didn't even try to use magic as there is no mention of him even trying to check if he can do it or not. Still world background was good but the story and mc behaviour is not up to par. Serious need of story editing or else the book will keep on going without anything new and thrilling for an isekai novel, Ps. Sorry for my bad grammar,

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BookWorms007
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I liked the novel initially. But as chapters went by, frustration began to build up. MC is far too weak. His harem members have no choice but to sacrifice for the MC. ( SPOILER - one member goes into a coma, another one gets kidnapped, another one has no choice but to follow royal decrees......). The entire novel revolves around his heroines suffering from various atrocities. Yet, the MC is not cruel enough. He still follows the conventions and values of EARTH. He keeps forgiving enemies who later comes to bite him in the back. And it took 350 chapters for the MC to realise that he should be powerful if he need to protect.his loved ones in this power hungry world. Sometimes I wonder if the MC was as naive as an infant in his previous life. Apparently, he keeps saying that he should get more powerful but he does very little to actually get powerful. Also the power system in this novel is weird. We don't have a standard criteria to measure the power levels of the MC. We don't know how strong the enemies are or what is the supposedly highest level a person can reach. The system is useless in this regard as well. Also, most of the chapters are filled with info dumps . I skipped through a lot of chapters due to this. It also becomes weird when author tries to introduce future technologies into such a magic driven mediaeval world. The fine line between technology and magic becomes blurred. Such technologies should only be used as accessories / suppliments to magic system. But author tries to give more importance to technology Eventually even forgetting about magic in the process. What a mess. It is kinda sad considering the fact that writing quality is excellent without grammatical errors.

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