Hum then I will cite the main problems of this story: 1 For a so-called Mc without emotion she really has a lot of emotion as shown by the question marks and exclamation marks '? ! ' and her love for her brothers and sisters 2 the second main problem is the fact that she is a dragon but she was born in a demi-human form and to acquire a dragon form when she reaches three years old is totally stupid I find otherwise good continuation Google translate
Liked by 4 people
LIKEThe ‘ ! And ? ‘ are showing if she is shouting and if she is asking a question. Also the reason they are born looking like a demi human is because when in true form they naturally collect mana within their hearts and baby dragons are sensitive to mana and it can cause strain on them mentally. The dragons in this story have just adapted this way to life and find it easier. Also i did the ‘born in a human like form’ because I kinda felt like it would be easier to write but i dont know. Thank you for the review :)
okay but their race should be half dragon instead of dragon and then she is supposed to be emotionless so why not make flat sentences with irony in it that would be perfect with an emotionless MC
W_D_Y_W_F_M:The ‘ ! And ? ‘ are showing if she is shouting and if she is asking a question. Also the reason they are born looking like a demi human is because when in true form they naturally collect mana within their hearts and baby dragons are sensitive to mana and it can cause strain on them mentally. The dragons in this story have just adapted this way to life and find it easier. Also i did the ‘born in a human like form’ because I kinda felt like it would be easier to write but i dont know. Thank you for the review :)