Review Detail of Demons_and_I in The unknown world where I was summoned
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Bro, I'm gonna be honest with you. You need to improve badly ... The grammar is bad, there is little to no depth in the story and the first chapter which is supposed to provide the most detail is missing important parts that contribute to the entire quality of the story. Concept wise, it's decent, but other than that, there is much to be done. Don't worry we are all beginners here, so it's obvious we have to try our best I'm rooting for you.
The unknown world where I was summoned
AKHIL_GOYAL
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So are you saying fill the first chapter with a whole lot of information rather than providing the readers with the feel of the story? This novel is not about that bro, it is about our mc exploring a whole new world, and as we travel with our mc we may get to learn many new things and information as you mentioned. The other thing you mentioned, 'grammar' I guess you have a quite unique concept of it
Nah... What I'm trying to say, is that you should provide more background info, sort of like a prologue. It Gives the readers a better understanding of what you are writing on. All I could get from the first chapter was this... Man is unhappy with life, so he jumps from building and wakes up in a field. Chases after a wagon for a while, and hitches a ride with the wagon driver who introduces himself as the driver of the wagonđ, et.c. That's all. Lastly, when I say grammar, it's not just my perspective Your use of punctuation is inadequate đ. No offense tho...
AKHIL_GOYAL:So are you saying fill the first chapter with a whole lot of information rather than providing the readers with the feel of the story? This novel is not about that bro, it is about our mc exploring a whole new world, and as we travel with our mc we may get to learn many new things and information as you mentioned. The other thing you mentioned, 'grammar' I guess you have a quite unique concept of it