Review Detail of Firelorn_P_King in The Deceitful One

The story is well thought out and the grammar is clean, neat and well written. I also enjoyed the plot of the story as well, very smooth and understandable. I know it starts a bit grey due to the MC's past but reading through the thoughts of the mc, Bryan, it's a bit funny too. Just from reading a few chapters I was able to visualize what was happening like a movie. I enjoyed the immersive nature of the story. And the situations made sense, heck, I would say they were kind of realistic. A very good story with a lot of potential overall.