After analyzing the story, I have concluded that this story has some potential. The structure of the story is actually pretty good structure. The main thing holding it back is the lack of proper world building and the constant run on sentences prevalent in the chapters. The pacing is also moving at the speed of light, although the chapters are essentially the prologue in this example. I believe that it could be better handled if you slow down in order to better explain the lore of this world. your take on the mechanics behind the System and AI could be further explored as well. I await the future of this novel. I will drop by the view it in the future to see how things progress.
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Thanks for the review. It is still the first five chapters and so since it is essentially the prologue of the story, the system A.I or intuition has yet to be introduced since he still hasn't been reincarnated. The first chapters were to stress Arkan's mindset, decision making and why he is the way he is so you would know why he will make the decisions he might make as the story progresses. Worldbuilding will take the stage once has reincarnated as in the first 5 chapters he is on earth. I will try to check my sentences for the next chapters and go back to the first few to check if they are worded correctly. Again, thank you for the review.
