Review Detail of GifflarGod in World after Earth
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Writing ability of author is clearly at the beginning of a beginner writer.. many details left out and jump from one scene to another without fluidity. also many mistakes while spelling words and some words shouldn't even be used Not much is known about the new world yet.. it seems like a very small world.. i hope there are other countries beside the 4 empires.. if capital of humanity's empire has 100 000 citizens it really is small.. and there is no mention of other people from earth.. i don't believe all of them died while fighting against the empire. The system of magic seems kinda weird.. i thought mc was gonna become a wizard but it seems like everyone fights with weapons and there doesn't seem to be real magic but just mana using knights. also the fact that there are only 4 mana core stages mentioned.. seems very little..
World after Earth
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I apologize, this is really my first novel, I'm Brazilian, and I don't understand much English, I'm using google, along with a writing AI app, but thanks for the constructive criticism. Another fact mentioned, I really wanted this feeling when I wrote it, of not telling a history lesson, but integrating the information slowly throughout the story.
Nothing to really apologize!✋🏻 It's understandable. And yes it's good to show a little at a time about the world.. i just hope it is very expansive world. You'll get better the more you write
Bruno_Brunin:I apologize, this is really my first novel, I'm Brazilian, and I don't understand much English, I'm using google, along with a writing AI app, but thanks for the constructive criticism. Another fact mentioned, I really wanted this feeling when I wrote it, of not telling a history lesson, but integrating the information slowly throughout the story.