Review Detail of Rosin_Romel in KKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK

This is my first novel So please don't judge me for my mistake . Instant if you mention my mistake to me it will be much more helpful to me . Its even better if you find solution for the mistake for me ( I am not good at solving mistake😔) . And also I am not a Native english speaker. and Sorry for grammatical mistakes.. 😁 Please comment how can I improve my story and story telling (Where I am very bad) . And Please recommend me some ideas( on every chapter comment or comment section) how I will Progress in story. Those who read my comment fully will lead a happy and good life . 😅😝